Peer evaluation of first draft

Peer Evaluation of First Draft

 

In class we were asked to peer assess each others opening sequences to discover what we had done well and whether they believed our sequence was good. They could then provide us with the feedback we needed to improve our sequence and get it to a higher grade. We were not particularly pleased with our sequence and felt it was not of a very high standard which was clearly reflected in our feedback.
They highlighted that they liked our variety of shots however they found it difficult to understand the story and it was not clear what we were trying to display.
Using this feedback we have decided to think through our whole sequence and think about costume and shots for example and think through exactly how we were going to use the components to convey the story. This would mean it would be more enjoyable for the audience to watch because they would become engaged with the piece and understand it better.

Once we have decided on what we are going to change we can go and re shot and capture more inventive shots that will be more precise and reveal the story more accurately.

Our Progress

Our progress

Once we filmed all of the shots we decided to put it together to see what it looked like. We were a bit worried that it wasn't good enough and were not very pleased with what we had done. To be able to go forward we decided to get feedback from our teachers so that they could advise us as what to do next.
   They gave us good feedback where they explained that we have the right idea we just need to improve the shots and some of the surroundings. For example we need to make sure the shots are not really shaky and need to think about the transitions from one to the other. Also they said that the bathroom we used didn't look realistic and wouldn't be something someone would have in their house.
   After looking over our feedback we have decided to re shot. We are going to go back to the park and re shot the necessary shots so that it looks more realistic and flows better. We are also going to use a different tap to make it stick to the theme better and actually grasp the dripping of the water.

 

Filming Progress

Shots

 

These are the first shots we have filmed for our opening sequence. It was quite difficult when we started off filming because even though we knew what we wanted it to look like we had to make it happen. On the first day of filming we filmed in the common room however we felt the environment was not correct and the shots came out very shaky and didn't look realist enough.

Therefore we choose to film these scene in the bathroom because it had a tap which was a main part of these shots. When filming we realised you could see us in the tap where it was so shiny so to make this less noticeable we put fake blood on the tap which also reinforced the thriller effect.

 

I feel the shots are looking better now and even though there are a couple of mistakes we can improve this later on. Now that we have our shots that were filmed inside we can focus on filming our shots at the park. This will mean our sequence will come together better and then we can evaluate what we need to re-shot.